Stro

[Drunk Monk]

Maybe it just needs more Lynda Carter GIFs?

if only...

Did I emphasize the drug use too much in favor of something else?

Not at all.  I think that's an important aspect of Stro, one of many, but perhaps it's your general sobriety that makes you miss that.  Actually, I think the time spent on that is just about right.  

Did you ever see that Doc Ellis doc?  I reviewed it - http://www.brotherhoodofdoom.com/doomFor...p?tid=3417 - it's worth your attention because apart from the racism angle, you are grappling many similar themes. It's not a perfect doc - it babbles on at the end - but there's likely a few elements you could poach off it. Give it a gander if you can.


I do agree with cf about the importance of the opening, btw.  It needs to foreshadow more.  The Jungian reference worked for me because I remember how much Stro was into Jung, but that might not really pop out to the casual viewer.  I don't recall a reference to that in your presentation.